Revisions:

Revisions:

Revisions that were made to the final draft deal mainly with passive speech.  After reviewing the paper it became evident that the language used in the first draft was not inline with the tone of the topic.  I edited some of the grammar used and tried to make the paper more straight forward.  Some of the paragraphs in the body did not flow between each other, so I rethought the body and made some minor changes there as well.

 

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